ok i am 12 and have been messing around writing and this is what i have please not it has mistakes and poelling errors and no "" marks i was to laxy to put them it at the time so if you could tell me what you think thanks so much and please no rude or out of the way comments

Introduction
Running across a field an unknown rider and the darkest fastest and best horse starlight are running faster than ever. The rider looks back for a split second and the next time the rider looks he sees the cold hard ground. They had fallen. A root was sticking up and Starlight’s hoof had got caught. The horse and rider make it back to the stable and he hurries to get inside before he is noticed. Who is the rider and why does he chose starlight…….

Chapter One
Worlds Best Horse
Are you ready yet? Mom called from down stairs Almost I called as I tied my boot. To day we were going to look at a black horse named starlight and maybe my very own horse. Ready I called running down the stairs to get in the car. Well I hope this is the one I said to mom maybe honey but it may not all be true he may be too much and not be in good health. Know I replayed with a tone that sounded hurt. I remember when I first met eclipse he was a black shy colt but had some fire. We where meant for each other I was the only one who could get him I basically lived in the barn with him he was great and had the fire of a wild mustang but could be gentle has a lamb. He was the one horse I love as much as my mom and he was unlucky sold. He was mine I could not see how they could just take him away from me like that. Were here baby mom said yes I thought time to get me my horse. He is not my fist I have had on before him. As I jumped out of they car waiting to see the horse a girl a little older than me came out and said don’t get your hopes up just yet I will make sure no one buys him from me and she walked to the barn . I was stunned what was she going to do spook him mess up the saddle make it look like he was lame so I could not ride him all of these thoughts crossed my mind until he walked out. I was in a daze he was so dirty mud every where then again came the thought of the threat and I started to think well if this is all that’s not too bad. In fact I loved it I could spend even more time with him. What in the world this is him mom said where is your mother said mom bring her here please then her mom walked out and looked just as surprised as mine did how in the world did this happen she said then walked to me and my mom and said I am so sorry he was groomed just fine when i went inside while Kara got him ready I am so sorry. It is fine I said I will groom him. Then I went to the car to get my grooming box and grabbed the rope from Kara and said thanks and left her with her mouth dropped open.

Chapter Two
Our Time to Shine
We went in to the barn and I brushed him and took all the time in the world to get him just perfect when I got through his coal black coat had a glimmer like it was a diamond and his tail and mane was as soft as a feather and moved as if it was weight less he hoofs shined bright enough you could see your reflection and his white star was snow white and his eyes looked blue as the sky but had the spirit of the wind. We walked out side and walked in a circle. We walked in perfect rhythm. Then mom said we were going to ride so we went to the tack room and we got his saddle and when we went to saddle him the stirrups where gone and so was the girth. When mom saw that she almost came unglued she hated when the horse, his stall, and his tack are not right but before she could say anything I suggested I ride bareback and she was ok with that so I mounted.

Chapter Three
The Ride of a Lifetime
We walked for a minute the we went to a trot. His trot was smooth as his walk. It was like we were on cloud nine. After that we cantered and that was the gait that changed Kara’s life. Mom was over joyed at how good we where and how our numbers really added up. We galloped like there was no tomorrow and we were so fast you could barely see him. Once we rode he had to see how well he jumped. He had wings is how it seemed cleared every jump then they said he could jump six feet and they made the jump. We walked to the end and got ready and took off and soared like a bird and had room to spare. Once we knew he was my kind of riding the vet checked him and the results changed my life. He was in great condition. He was mine all mine so it was stelled we bought him. Little did I know that Kara was fixing to be in my life as long as I rode.

Chapter Four
The Next Day

As we rolled up in Kara’s drive way I saw him starlight that is ready to go he whinnied and ran to the gate I ran to his paddock and threw my arms around him. He is all mine I inhaled the deep scent of his mane it was comforting and that was till Kara came out dressed like she was fixing to ride she graded my horse’s lead rope out of my hand then I asked what are you dong he is mine the papers say so give me the lead rope. Before I knew it she jumped on him bare back and rode off I was lost in a daze. What if some thing happed, where is she going and what if they get hurt thoughts that race through my mind. Why was she so mad at me I had no time to lose I went and told my mom and Kara’s mom. I figured this would happen said Kara’s mom she was so mad that you guys bought her and know I guess she wants revenge on you I am so sorry. I know this may sound weird I said but can I ride one of your other horses to get her I knew I am not familiar with the paths but I know where she was heading. I guess if it is ok with your mother Kara’s mom replied. Its ok go get her and bring them both back pony her

Chapter Five
The search is on

I was unfamiliar with the paths but lighting knew them by heart. When we stopped for a brief moment we herd them they weren’t to far a way. I guess lighting heard them to because he took off in desprat search of his friend. After about I couple of minutes I heard Kara crying. I hide behind a bush as she said to starlight what am I to do you the only one who understands my is leaving for good with a rich little snob. I quietly dismounted and tied lighting reins to a tree. Kara I said listen get one lighting and we will ride back I am sorry that you feel this way. You want to help me Kara replied why would I let you get on him and why should I let you have him. Listen said you need to understand that he I mine now don’t be a fool just ride lighting back so we can get this over with and you wont ever have to deal with me again. Fine but as long as you take good care of him. Then she mounted and so did I and we rode of back to the house that was until we got lost in the woods.

Chapter Six
Lost and Alone
Are we lost i asked Kara no we are on a trail she said what a trail to doom I thought we’ll follow it till we get to the end it leads to a old cabin that has a phone we can call from there Kara said in a happy tone . We rode a while then I heard a noise silly I said to myself it is just the wind no need to get scared. Then Kara heard it I think because she stopped and said what was that. The wind I replied. Then when I turned to see if something was flowing us a at a mountain cat jumped out of some blueberry bushes and pounce right at me I went in to a gallop and the cat was close. Kara flowlled me close the starlight soared in the air over an old log and lighting barley cleared it but the cat didn’t. He stopped before he got to it and left. Strange it was it was like a barrier was around us where no evil could come in. then I leaned up to starlight ear and said take me home and little did I know he walked then trotted till I saw Kara’s house it was a feeling of happynes and wonder as we dismounted and I asked Kara why did the cat stop. She did not answer I looked at her she was crying so I took her arm and brought her to a tree in the field after we cleaned the horses and feed them.

Chapter seven
The Talk of a Lifetime
Then when we got sat down se let it all go. She told me about the cabin and what had happen there and why she was crying. Turns out that the family her dad and mom stayed the night on night while on a trail ride. Her mom and dad had gotten in to a fight and her mother told her dad to ride off and never come back. Her dad’s horse was starlight. Kara got scared and got on krazy ,her pony at the time, and followed her dad she lost sight of him once and she heard a sound ,like the one while we were riding, and she froze because she heard yelling and screaming so she ran in a gallop to find the worst sight she could ever see. Her dad was benign attacked by a mountain lion, like the one we saw; she scared him a way and sat down by her dad. He told her to get on starlight and try to get back to the cabin and get her mom. But she told him she would not leave him. But he said she had to but instead of getting on starlight, witch was much to big for her at the time, she got on Krazy and rode back but she had to make a jump she had never done before there was no way around it she jumped but did not make it her horses had fallen she was fine she told the horses she would be right back. She ran to the cabin and got her mom and her mom took off to her dad. Mean while Kara was going to find Krazy but when she got there he was dying a snake had bit him and he was unable to move. Kara fell on top of him crying at praying that he would live. He did for about 2 more years and then he was in a trailer wreck caused by another car and Kara swore she would never jump again. Her dad lived but was unable to ride he had to lose a leg that a loin ripped up so bad but he still comes to the stables and sees starlight. I was shocked and amazed at the same time we walked off and we went to see her dad while starlight was loaded up.